虹口区初三一模部分作文范文（一）2016.1.15
范文1：My favourite way of communicating
My favourite way of communicating is to use Wechat. Wechat is popular among people of all ages. With it, we can talk to people all over the world at any time. For example, my brother now stays in America to further his study. Although we can’ｔ
meet
each other, we can use Wechat to share our lives and talk about exciting stories which happen in our schools. That makes me feel happy. Wechat is so convenient and makes the world smaller. Besides, our life has become more colourful since Wechat appeared. In a word, I like Wechat best and with Wechat my life is full of joy.
整体评价：
文章结构清晰，选材合理；
文章举例的事例与议论部分关联性与逻辑性较强；
文章句式多变，简单句与复合句相结合，彰显出作者的英语写作功底；
本文最后一句中划线部分Wechat改为it可避免重复。
范文2：My favourite way of communicating
With the development of the modern world, communicating with others by Wechat
or e-mail becomes more and more popular. But I still prefer communicating by letters. It
is no doubt that it is the best way to express our feelings and to learn about another person. When my brother went abroad, he kept in touch with me by letters. Then I found that waiting for a letter is also an enjoyable time. I’m convinced that communicating with others by letter can make people closer.
整体评价:
文章观点新颖。
开头部分道出了当今社会的普遍现象，当读者认为作者会选择Wechat或
Email来展开全文的时候，作者话锋一转说出了自己喜欢写信的原因，且情感真实；
文章举例的事例与议论部分过渡自然，逻辑性较强。
范文3：My favourite way of communicating
Nowadays with the development of science and techonology, the ways of communicating are becoming increasingly various. However, I prefer writing letters. I
can still remember that experience when I made a new friend. At that time we promised
to write letters to each other once a week. And I was looking forward to receiving his
letter every day. Life was more attractive when I chose to write letters. It is not only good for my heath but also very interesting. So I am convinced that I will insist on my
favourite way of communicating.
整体评价:
文章观点新颖。
与范文 2 有异曲同工之妙；
文章第一句话的划线部分删除会使文章的开头更简练；
文章中划线部分receiving his letter 改为hearing from him。
范文4：My favourite way of communicating
As we all know, Wechat is one of the most popular ways of communicating in our lives.
However, my favourite way of communicating is using mobile phones. One day, I had a
very emergent thing to discuss with my friend. At first, he used Wechat, but it was too
complex to type many words. At last, I made a phone call to solve the problem instead. I
think that using mobile phone is more convenient and direct. It makes us use less time to
finish more things. Also, it enables us to understand each other better. That’s favourite way of communicating.
整体评价:
文章情感真实，事例贴近实际生活，且议论部分与叙述部分关联性较高；
划线部分using mobile phones不妥因为微信也是使用手机，此处改为making phone calls
更好；
emergent thing 这个词才大了，改为urgent更为贴切；
划线部分没有表达清楚，改为it was too complex to explain everything by typing many
words更好。
范文5：My favourite way of communicating
With the development of technology, we have different ways of communicating. I
prefer to using E-mails. My sister went to Australia five years ago. At first, I didn
know how to contact her and I was really upset. However, she told me that I could send
an email to her. I like to use emails to communicate with others for many important
reasons. First, it is convenient and fast. It enables me to communicate with my sister
though we are miles away from each other. It makes me feel closer to my sister. In
addition, It is free. I have to admit that sending emails is my favourite way of
communicating.
整体评价:
文章事例情感真实，表达恰当，句型富有变化。
范文6：My favourite way of communicating
There are many ways of communicating such as QQ, MSN and Wechat. Among
them, I like Wechat best. I went to Beijing last month. It was so beautiful that I wanted
to share the views with my friends. I took the photos and sent them to my friends
through Wechat. It was very convenient. I can communicate with my parents and friends.
What’s more, it is free. In a word, Wechat is my favourite way of communicating.
整体评价：
文章结构清晰，选材合理，语言简练；
划线句在议论部分显得有些突然，可以做如下修改：I can also speak to my parents and friends easily through Wechat. 更突出convenient这一论点。