noticing the surroundings. This sort of
phenomenon is not uncommon in some metropolis（大都市）, especially among the
youngsters.
Dad, I am a bit worried about disposing of nuclear weapon.
（顾薇薇）
• From the drawing we can easily identify what the author intend to convey. The increasing use of mobile phones can do harm to our lives.
(吴佳凤）
• As the drawing presents, there is a man walking across the street absorbedly（全神 贯注地） focusing on his cell phone without
• We must focus on reduce use cell phone everywhere.（改为focus on reducing using)
• Focus on doing • Reducing doing
问题三：句子成分残缺
• But many people think that mobile phone （is) harmful, also some people think that(mobile phone is) good.
When you are boring（改为bored), you could chat with your friends.
问题二：搭配错误
• With the development of science and technology, more and more mobile phones arising（arise一般和problems 搭配）改为 have been produced.
画的内涵。
学生佳作
• Nowadays, more and more people use mobile phones without restraint（无所忌惮 地）. They often use it in all occasions. In the comic, they use the mobile phones while crossing the road. It’s too crazy.
If you can empty the dustbin, you can do anything.
• You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then express your views on the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.
• With the development of society, some students think basic knowledge is not useful. The picture reflects that some students begin to question the significance of learning basic knowledge and skills（用自己的语言总结） .
四六级作文—漫画作文
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People are crossing the street looking atalking sticks to see.
开头难
• 出现问题： １.有些同学第一段太过冗长，不少同学直接
引用漫画原话。 ２.描述漫画时，有些同学时态使用错误。 ３.有些同学只是描述了漫画但却没有引出漫
语言问题
1.词性使用错误 2.搭配错误 3.句子成分残缺 4.中式英语
问题一：分不清一些单词的词性
We enjoy the technology which bring us convenient.(改为 convenience)
As far as I am concern(+ed), play phone in the class must make students not pay attention to what the teachers said.
The Importance of Doing Small Things Before Undertaking Something Big
Para 1 • This is a thought-provoking（引人深思的）
cartoon: a young guy tells his father that he is a bit worried about disposing of nuclear waste; however, his father informs the guy of a truth: if one can empty the dustbin, he can do anything(用自己的语言重新陈述）.
No offense, but by the time we’re in the job market, won’t that stuff be outdated
• For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay, you should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then express your views on the importance of learning basic skills.