2015年3月21日雅思写作范文及语料库2015年3月21日小作文：校园重建图：地图题：薛鹏解析：地图题写作策略: 建立标轴;有序写作;注意衔接;适度解释。
2015年3月21日雅思写作题目：Some people believe that famous people's support towards international aids organizations draws the attentions to problems. Others think that celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?题目解析：名人效应是否可以提升对于慈善组织的关注度薛鹏点评：新题出现：名人效应 + 慈善组织两种观点讨论提问标准：Some people believe that …… Others think that …… Discuss both sides and give your opinion?布局图：首段：背景介绍+争议焦点+作家立场二段：正方观点的展开(三点展开;一定有对于论点的解释和细节的支持)三点：反方观点的展开(二点展开;一定有对于论点的解释和细节的支持)尾段：再次亮明观点+总结理由薛鹏雅思写作词汇替换语料库：1. famous people=celebrities n名人2. top stars n明星3. successful business leaders n成功的企业家4. international aids organizations n国际援助组织5. support = give a support to v给予支持……6. draws the attentions to problems = attract the public concern about (v)吸引了人们对于……的关注7. celebrities make the problems less important = celebrities’ efforts are not that significant名人的关注对于社会问题没有什么影响8. enhance the reputation of sth v提高……的美誉度9. enlarge the influence of …… v扩大……的影响力10. credibility n公信力;reputation n 美誉度作家立场：名人对于慈善组织的关注可以使得公众对于一些社会问题更加重视，因此，是值得鼓励的。
新东方网薛鹏思路拓展：慈善团体援助的对象：贫困疾病;环境污染;自然灾害等。
薛鹏思路拓展：正方观点：1. 明星作为社会的精英群体，应该传递正能量，名人的影响力是有导向性的，因此，可以吸引公众的关注。
可以想象，对于一些社会问题的解决，公众的关注是有利好的影响。
例如，在国际上某些国家发生自然灾害，需要经各类援助的时候，明星如果可以带头捐助，可以鼓励更多的慈善捐助，有助于帮助受灾民众摆脱困境。
2. 明星对于国际援助组织的支持有助于扩大慈善组织的影响力，很多慈善团体建立的初衷就是为世界上有困境的人提供义务援助，但是，很多慈善组织的发展阻力重重，困境来自财政的紧张，公众的误解等。
如果明星可以连续地为慈善公益组织提供援助和宣传，这样，慈善组织可以吸引更多人的参与。
明星以自己的积极的影响为慈善组织代言，可以提升慈善组织的美誉度和公信力。
3. 明星作为受到社会尊敬的群体，受到最多的赞美，得到相对高的经济回报，他们应该为社会做出更大的贡献，他们对于慈善组织积极的宣传或者援助，就是履行自己的社会责任，体现自我价值的方式。
点评：明星辅助慈善组织对于被援助的对象，对于慈善组织，对于明星个人的利好。
反方立场：有些人对于我的立场是怀疑的，有人认为明星效应对在提升援助组织的影响力方面意义是有限的。
第一，明星毕竟是个人的力量，他们的宣传和援助对于一些国际性问题的解决是杯水车薪。
例如贫困人口和环境污染问题。
第二，名人效应是一把双刃刀。
例如，有些明星为禁毒组织做宣传，号召人们远离毒品，但是，他们却没有履行对于公益组织的责任，他们本身吸毒或者犯罪，引发的是公众对于慈善组织的怀疑。
点评：他人的立场展开反方意见。
薛鹏原创范文赏析：首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点+作家立场A charity organization usually assume much of the responsibility for aiding the needy, providing health care, and taking care of the victims of natural disasters and so on. However，whether the assistance from the celebrities has a inspiring role to play has ignited public debate. Personally speaking, the charitable giving from social elites can benefit the need, charitable institution and themselves.解析：assume much of the responsibility v更多地承担责任解析： However，whether …… has ignited public debate 然而，是否……引起了人们的争议解析：charitable institution = a charity organization n 慈善组织解析：help = assistance n帮助点评：淡化模板;个性开篇;主题明确二段: 正方观点的展开：明星支持慈善组织的利好：First，as the attention-getting group，famous people should and could pass on active influence，for the speeches and behaviors of those top stars could set a fine learning example. For example, those nations suffering from the lack of medical care or insufficient financial support can, to a large extent, gain benefits from the generous donation from the celebrities if some natural disasters occur around the world. The warm-hearted helps deriving from generous business leaders or super stars can，in most cases，help those unfortunate countries to recover from the adversity. Also，since the support and concern from the influential figure could generate media awareness，those charities can become the beneficiaries too. The reputation and credibility of charitable institution can be greatly enhanced under the subtle impact of top stars. Last，celebrities，as a respectable group，usually live under spotlight, receive maximum praises and comfortable economic reward，hence，they are expected to make their unique contribution to the community as a returned favor. Their selfless donation could fulfill their social responsibilities, embody their kindnesses, and bring them great sense of satisfaction.解析：personages = top stars = celebrities n 明星拓展：famous people = influential figure = those who enjoy tremendous popularity n名人解析：should and could pass on active influence 应该也可以传递正能量解析：set a fine learning example v起到标杆作用解析：hence = therefore = in this sense 因此解析：as a returned favor 作为回报解析：can become beneficiaries too 也可以成为受益者点评：淡化模板;逻辑清晰;论证有力;细节展开;句法多变;词汇精准。
感悟：看花容易绣花难。
功夫在诗外;积累在点滴。
三段：反方意见的展开：他人口吻;二点理由Notwithstanding all that，some people might remain suspicious of my stand. For a start, some people argue that stars’ assistance is limited and thus less significant in terms of resolving some international problems such as helping the population of poverty-stricken countries shake off poverty or tackling global environmental contamination. Another argument hold by some people is that the impact of celebrities might be a double-edged weapon. By that they mean, if some stars fail to practice what they preach, then, the public might lose confidence in the organizations they publicized. Some anti-drug stars ended up becoming drug addicts might be a good example.解析：Notwithstanding all that 虽然如此解析：remain suspicious of my stand 对于我的立场保持怀疑解析：and thus 因此解析：helping the population of poverty-stricken countries shake off poverty v 帮助贫困国家人口摆脱贫困解析：tackling global environmental contamination v解决全球环境污染问题解析：Another argument hold by some people is that 很多人也许认为……拓展：still，some people might believe that 此外，还有人认为解析：end up doing sth 最终以……为结局点评：反方意见，他人口吻;论据为二;侧重清晰;作家文采;文风顺畅。