下面的几段译文就较好地照顾到了西方人
的思维和理解习惯。
老者道:“西方却去不得。
那山离此有六十里远,正是西方必由之路。
却有八百里火焰,周围寸草不生,若过此山,就是铜脑盖,铁身躯,也要化成汁哩。
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“It’s impossible to get to the west,”the old man replied, “The mountains are about twenty miles from here. You have to cross them to get to the west, but they’re over 250 miles of flame. Not a blade of grass can grow anywhere around. Even if you had a skull of bronze and a body of iron, you would melt trying to cross them.”
(詹纳尔译《西游记·孙悟空一调芭蕉扇》)
美国把贸易和人权扯在一起,只会损害两国的经济利益。
The US policy of linking trade with human rights can only bring harm to the economic interests of the two countries.
关起门来搞建设是不成的,中国的发展离不开世界。
China can’t develop in isolation from the rest of the world.
四、戒主语暗淡
主语是句子的灵魂,定住译文的主语的是关键性一步棋。
主语定偏了,整个句子将显得松散乏力,甚至误导读者。
如果这个问题不解决,势必影响两国的利益。
Failure to settle this issue is bound impair the relations between the two countries seriously.
If the problem is not solved , it is sure to affect the interests between the two countries
在上面的两种译文中,显然第一种译文主语选得好,句子流畅。
共同的利益把我们两个伟大的国家连接在一起。
What holds our two great nations together is the cement of common interests.。