Robert was saved by Henry, not by his new friends.
swim look for tools including ropes, sticks and so on ask others for help
Robert apologised to Henry and thanked him very much. The boys who had laughed at Henry were also ashamed of what they had done and apologized.
• 6. Other boys also felt ashamed and apologised.
Other boys were also ashamed of what they had done to Henry, apologising too.
The final possible version
Paragraph2：interpretation of details
New Information ＆Emotional Development for paragraph 2
How did Robert thank Henry? Did he shed tears? What was Henry's reaction? What did the boys do and think? What did they learn from the experience?
2. He kept struggling in the river.
He kept struggling in the river using both his arms and legs, with all his strength.
3. Henry took off his clothes and shoes quickly and dived into the river.
Robert made a sincere apology to Henry for having called him a coward and showed great gratitude for him, tears always in eyes. Henry felt so delighted that they were friends again.
Continuation writing
Interpretation of our problems
• 与文章无关或勉强相关的内容太多，应该相关的内容太 少
• 动作或心理方面的细节描写不够具体。 • 字数不足，信息量不够，表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传
达故事类文章的情感因素 • 各种语法错误
Interpretation of the Text (Who)
Henry didn't want to meddle with it.
Henry went home and Robert called him a coward.
Robert was nearly drowned when he bathed with other boys in the river, who didn't even help him.
All the boys laughed at Henry and didn't play with him.
Henry didn't care.
Interpretation of plots
Para. 1 Robert was fast sinking. Para 2: Thus, Robert’s life was saved.
• Robert felt he was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into absolute hopelessness.He kept struggling in the river using both his arms and legs, with all his strength.Henry happened to pass by. Tearing off his clothes with his trembling hands, throwing his shoes aimlessly somewhere around him, he dived into the river. So ashamed did Robert feel when he saw Henry come to his rescue that he was close to tears, thinking of what he had done to Henry.
• Robert made a sincere apology to Henry for having called him a coward and showed great gratitude for him, tears always in eyes. Henry felt so delighted that they were friends again.Other boys were also ashamed of what they had done to Henry, apologising too. From this experience, they all learnt what true courage was.
So ashamed did Robert feel when he saw Henry come to his rescue that he was close to tears, thinking about what he had done to Henry.
5. Robert apologised to Henry and thanked him. He had tears in his eyes. Henry felt glad.
Tearing off his clothes with his trembling hands, throwing his shoes aimlessly somewhere around him, he dived into the river.
4. Robert felt ashamed when he saw Henry come to save him.
Writing skills
• 可以通过对于人物动作神态的扩充比如情绪情感、心 理活动、具体动作、场景描写以及修辞更多种方式使得 文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。
Sentences from students
• Robert was desperate. • He kept struggling in the river. • Henry happened to pass by and he took off his clothes
Summary
Homework
• Try other possible plots according to what we have done today.
tears in his eyes. Henry felt glad. • Other boys also felt ashamed and apologised.
Possible versions
1. Robert was desperate.
Robert felt he was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into absolute hopelessness.
Paragraph1：interpretation of
details
New Information ＆Emotionals Robert thinking about? How did Henry know Robert was in danger and saved him? If he could swim, how did he dive into the river? What did he think of at that moment? When Robert saw his new friends were away and Henry came to save him, what was he doing and thinking about?
Reading for the relationship of the characters
closest friends in the same class
Henry
classmates
Robert
classmates
Interpretation of the Text(What)
Robert and Henry are friends in the same class. One day they found a fight on the way from school.
and shoes quickly and dived into the river. • Robert felt ashamed when he saw Henry came to save
him, thinking about what he had done to Henry. • Robert apologised to Henry and thanked him. He had