Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster.
亮点写作的注意事项
• 1. 过多的亮点，显得堆砌 • 对策：亮点分布，尽量首句 • 2.亮点单一，例如全段排比或比喻 • 对策：最好总—排比---总的结构。照顾段
落的完整性。 • 3.华而不实，不重视内容，徒有框架没有内
容
• ，没有注意谋篇，顾
can direct the way for those who are in dim situation.
排比
If I could go back to the past and do the above mentioned things, the last thing my grandpa remembered would not be the indifference and the back of his beloved grandson. If I could travel back through time, the last memory between him and me would not be his closed eyes and the dead look of half-unconscious suffering. Then now, I would not have to live with this unbearable regret and pain for the rest of my life. If only I could!
when it began to rain.( no sooner， than)
倒装
• Had it not been for her sticking to being on time, she wouldn’t have earned herself a well-paid job and more importantly built up an image of reliability and integrity.
亮点句型写作指导
除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写 作中，增分添彩。
比喻
• A is to B what C is to D. • Like the sunshine , kindness can help
those in trouble. • Kindness is like the lighthouse, which
many fish are swimming. • Under no circumstance should we • 类似的用法： • Never/ By no means / on no account / in no
way / at no time should I . • Hardly/scarcely had I got into the room
Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance.
虚拟语气在写 作中的提分技 巧 作文练习评
讲
• 2. Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster.
• Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance. Firstly, I would teach my modern theory and knowledge to the governors, instructing them to fight against the enemies and construct powerful armies. Secondly, all the citizens would be called on to unite together and resist other countries’ invasion bravely. What’s more, joining some anti-invaders parties would also be my choice.
此失彼 • 对策：谋好篇，定好每点行数，才能下笔
亮点句型写作训练
• 练习： • 1.说明挫折的意义 • 2.你怎样看待老师对学生的影响。 • 3.说说你对母爱的理解 • 4.谈谈决心对人的影响
倒装（赢在写作 P37-38）
• Simple as the story is , • Here goes the saying that ___. • Only when _____ can we ___. • Only in this way, can we • Only by doing -, can we____. • Only after doing sth, can we • On the west of the school lies a pond, where