to kill it for food.
Mother deer
clever / smart / intelligent, brave, stay calm in danger
Did the plan work? The tiger got frightened and ran away …
While escaping, the tiger
was cheated by the jackal? • Think about what the jackal did to the tiger just now?
persuade the tiger to return to the cave; knot their tails together • How would the jackal cheat the tiger by doing so?
Task II: What to write?
Para. 1 The deer saw the jackal and the tiger coming together.
Para. 2 The tiger was shocked to hear this and he was sure now the jackal cheated him. • How did the tiger feel and what would he do? • What would happen to the tiger, the jackal and the deer in the end?
人物性格分析
1. 从人物的动作中 2. 从人物的言语中 3. 从他人的评价中
who
traits
who
Mother deer
the tiger jackal
traits
clever/smart/intelligent, brave, stay calm in danger cowardly, timid cunning, not reliable in the eyes of the tigher
What
came across a jackal,
happened who suggested they go
Agree? didn’t want to take a chance;
back to the cave to find out the truth.
afraid of being left alone to die
动作：The young ones wandered haply here and there. 心理：The deer was frieghtened ... 环境： There were bones of dead animals all over the cave. ......
拟人(把动物当作人来描写，赋予有生命的动物以人的禀性， 使之像人一样地说话，行动，有思想，有感情。)
整体阅读，确定故事基本情节
who, when, where, what happed, how would the story continue
who when where what happened summarize the story
who
Mother deer and her fawns; a tiger; a jackal
Para. 2 The tiger was shocked to hear this and he was sure now the jackal cheated him.
How frightened would the deer feel when seeing the tiger and the jackal coming?
语言表达： 主要时态和语态： 主要句式摘记：
各类描写：
修辞：
语言表达：
语言简洁，表达不复杂（简单句较多）；含一些对话；故事 叙述
主要时态和语态： 一般过去时；主动语态
主要句式摘记： 各类描写： 修辞：
The deer was frightened because ...(原状从) Fortunately, the tiger was not ... (adv, + 句子) The deer was trying to ... when she heard ...(时状从） ④ The cunning jackal was now sure the tigher was ....(宾从）
Task III: What to write?
Para. 1 The deer saw the jackal and the tiger coming together. • What did the deer say that shocked the tiger and convinced him he
Mother deer
the tiger
the jackal
clever / smart / intelligent, brave, stay calm in danger
cowardly, timid
cunning (狡猾的)， not reliable in the eyes of the tiger
• Theme: intelligence can save one from dangerous situations
续写情节发展
1. 情节合理、上下文衔接连贯； 2. 已知情节+第二段开头句推断 第一段可能的情节发展； 3. 人物性格和情节创设要吻合； 4. 渲染、升华主题 （寓言、心 灵鸡汤类的文本）。
关于语言那些事儿
问题:
•1.句式单一，只会简单句； •2.语法错误严重，句不成句； •3.词汇严重缺乏，词不达意； •4.中式英语，缺乏地道表达； •5.标点混乱，往往一逗到底。
仝亚军
What lead her fawns out of the stayed calm by pretending to be a
happened cave when she saw the and thought fierce animal waiting
tiger coming back.
of a plan
Task I: Read for plots
Who
Mother deer and her fawns; a tiger; a jackal
Where
in the tiger’s cave
Mother deer was trying to Her reaction? to scare the tiger away
课例赏析
A Wise Deer &
A Cowardly Tiger
浙江省十校联盟2019年10月高三联考读后续写 富阳中学 王璐
Analysis of the text
Literary genre (文体): Fable 寓言故事
Features (特征): • Tell a short story using simple words and
Questions for the continued plots
para 1
para 2
Questions for the continued plots
para 1
para 2
The deer saw the jackal and the tiger coming The tiger was shocked to hear this and
Would the tiger have a peaceful talk with the fierce animal since he was afraid to be eaten by him?
Was he easily fooled? If he heard he would be eaten, would he believe it and get scared?
sentences, from which you can learn a lesson. • The character can be a person or an animal.
续写材料的文体和文体特征
小说、 童话、寓言、故事
语言特征
语言的协同性
• 1. 关注语篇整体语言表达 • 2. 关注文中主要时态和语态 • 3. 分析文中句式特点 • 4. 仔细研读各类描写 • 5. 关注修辞
2. What the jackal did hat would happen to the tiger, the jackal and the deer in the end?
3. How would the jackal cheat the tiger by doing so?
Jackal’s proposal? knot their tails
together; never
leave
the jackal
Agree?
cunning (狡猾的)， not reliable in the eyes of the tiger
cowardly, timid
the tiger
agreed unwillingly Why? frightened; didn’t trust the jackal.
summarize the story
One day when mother deer was trying to lead her young ones out of the cave she saw the tiger coming towards it. Staying calm, she thought of a plan to scare the tiger away. While escaping, the tiger came across a jackal who suggested they go back to find out the truth. In order to convince the tiger, the jackal tied their tails in a not and then went towards the cave togethe.