《雾》
Fog
茅盾
Mao Dun
|译文摘自张培基《英译中国散文选二》
但在白天看来，却就平凡得很。

并排的五六个山峰，差不多高低，就只最西的一峰戴着一簇房子，其余的仅只有树；中间最大的一峰竟还有濯濯地一大块，像是癞子头上的疮疤。

现在那照例的晨雾把什么都遮没了；就是稍远的电线杆也躲得毫无影踪。

In the daytime,however,it was all prosaic.The five or six peaks forming the front row were about the same height.The westernmost one had on top a cluster of houses while the rest were topped by nothing but trees.The highest one in the middle had on it a large piece of barren land,like the scar on a favus-infected human head.Now,as usual,the morning fog had shut out everything completely,including the not-too-distant wire poles.
要点：
1，“并排的五六个山峰”多重定语，分前后，其中表状态的“并排的”可以后置，译为The five or six peaks forming the front row
2，“中间最大的一峰”中表位置的“中间“可以后置译为The highest one in the middle
3，“濯濯”指山坡上光秃秃的样子，译为barren land
4，“癞子头”是指黄廯感染的头，译为favus-infected human head
4，文中出现多次表示“遮盖”的词，译者根据不同语境，分别用了veil,shut out, shroud,obliterate作同义替换，记得总结哦
综述：
本段重点依旧在于多重定语的翻译，表位置和状态的定语可以后置译为状语~
渐渐地太阳光从浓雾中钻出来了。

那也是可怜的太阳呢！光是那样的淡弱。

随后它也躲开，让白茫茫的浓雾吞噬了一切，包围了大地。

Gradually,however,the sun managed to show through the dense fog.Yet how pitifully pale it looked!And soon it disappeared altogether,leaving the white thick fog to engulf everything and shroud mother earth.
要点：
1，“钻”即“从…中显露”译为show through，在遇到不会翻或找不到对应词的动词时，我们可以用一个词组或短语将此动作描述出来~
2,”那也是可怜的太阳呢！光是那样的淡弱”意为“太阳的光线是那样弱，真是可怜”，合译为how pitifully pale it looked!
综述：
注意对于不熟悉的动词的翻译以及本段的合译~当然还是要尽量丰富自己的词汇，毕竟如果过多使用词组和短语也会使句子变的冗杂~。