支持/反对段 反对/支持段1 反对/支持段2
Organize your article
Firstly
previously, beforehand, foremost, initially, originally, principally, mainly, essentially, basically
How essays are scored
Standard one
how to develop your topic
Standard two
how to organize your article
Standard three
how to use the language
Develop your topic
Review
You will not learn much about life if you are always comfortable.
Children must learning about life in a comfortable place. If a child is no safe, the child can’t learn nothing. I wanna have children in the future. My duty is for keep my children safety and protection from bad experiences. I gonna give my children food, clothes, and other stuffs. Because my child is comfortable, they will learn a lot of things about life. On the contrary, I disagree with the statement.
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Organize your article
只注意连接 词？ too young, too simple, sometimes naï ve！
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避免观点重复
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避免离题
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避免没有逻辑的衔接
Use the language- word
• • • • • • • • • • • • • Can: Get worse: Develop: Expect: Result: Try: Use: Begin: Require: Important: And: Very: Like: Have the ability to do/ capability of doing Deteriorate Ameliorate Anticipate Consequence Endeavor Utilize Initiate Necessitate Indispensable/ Imperative/ Crucial Furthermore/ In addition/ Apart from Totally/ Immensely/ Tremendously Be fairly keen on/ Be obsessed with
After review
Children must learning (learn) about life in a comfortable place. If a child is no (not) safe, the child can’t (cannot) learn nothing (anything). I wanna (want to) have children in the future. My duty is for (will be to) keep my children safety and protection (protect them) from bad experiences. I gonna (am going to) give my children food, clothes, and other stuffs (things). Because (If) my child is (children are) comfortable, they will learn a lot of things about life. On the contrary (Therefore), I disagree with the statement.
Transition Displays unity, progression, and
coherence.
Displace consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic Expression variety, appropriate word choice, and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors.
Use the language- syntax
•倒装句 •强调句 简单句、 并列句、 复合句的 交叉使用 •状语开头句 • 副词开头句 •不定式开头句 •介词短语开头句（时间地 点居多）
Use the language- syntax
• 只有这样，我们才能提高英语水平。（倒装） • Only in this way can we ameliorate our English. • 直到老师告诉他，他才意识到自己的错误。（强调） • It was not until the teacher had told him that he realized his mistake. • 看着她脸上不开心的表情，我觉得很难过。（状语开头） • Watching the unhappy look on her face, I felt sad. • 幸运的是他逃过一劫。（副词开头） • Fortunately, he survived. • 保护动物就是保护我们自己。（s is to defend ourselves.
Develop your topic
- evaluate the conclusion
In conclusion, although I have to accept that it is imperative that something be done about creating a new holiday for people and find the underlying thrust of the implied proposal utterly convincing, I cannot help but feel wary of taking such irrevocable steps and personally feel that a more measured approach would be more rewarding.
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作文简介
综合 作文 独立 作文
• Reading: 3min • Listening: 2min
• Writing: 20min
• Writing: 30min ( above 350 words)
The independent writing task
• Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? • [A sentence or sentences that present an issue appear here.] • Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
–evaluate the opening
The importance of the issue raised by the posed statement, namely creating a new holiday for people, cannot be underestimated as it concerns the very fabric of society. As it stands, the issue of creating a new holiday raised profound implications for the future. However, although the subject matter in general cannot be dismissed light-heartedly, the perspective of the issue as presented by the statement raises certain qualms regarding practical application.
Independence writing scoring rubric
Opening
Effectively addresses the topic and task.
Is well organized and well developed, Supporting using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/ or details.
Develop your topic
At the heart of any discussion regarding an issue pertaining to creating a new holiday, it has to be borne in mind that a delicate line has to be trod when dealing with such matters. The human resources involved in such matters cannot be guaranteed regardless of all the good intentions that may be lavished. While it is true that creating a new holiday might be a viable and laudable remedy, it is transparently clear that applied wrongly such a course of action could be calamitous and compound the problem rather than provide a solution.