• Revised: The movie was much longer than Kara anticipated, and she fell asleep twice.
• (15) ① And application takes judgment. ② The judgment involves something of a sixth sense in
a high performance of mind. • Revised: And application takes judgment, which involves
something of a sixth sense in a high performance of mind.
•(16) ① I considered the onward and upward course she had set for me.
•Revised: Twenty-five students have already
expressed a desire to attend the program next summer. They and their parents who stand to gain the most by the government grant.
• Revised: Founded in 1871, Smith College is the
premier all-women’s college in the United States.
• (10) Citizens who knew what was going on voted him out of the office. • Revised: Knowledgeable citizens voted him out of the office.
• Revised: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by what he does.
• Revised: A man isbut also by his deeds.
• （4）We thought she was charming, intelligent, and a very capable young woman.
• Revised : He was born in a small town in South China in the early 50s. Later he entered a conservatory. In the 70s he became a famous musician.
• （3）A man is judged not only by what he says but also by his deeds.
英语应用文写作复习笔记
第一部分 basic writing(30%) 张金慧
• Section 1: revision.(10*1.5分) • Section 2: writing, 根据汉语提纲写一篇120词 的作文。（15分）
Section 1: revision.(10*1.5分)
• （1）I have several reasons that phone will not kill letter writing.
• (13)In my opinion, this wasteful policy ought to be revoked. Revised: This wasteful policy ought to be revoked.
• (14) The movie was much longer than Kara anticipated. She fell asleep twice.
• (11) There are twenty-five students who have already expressed a desire to attend the program next summer. It is they and their parents who stand to gain the most by the government grant.
• (12) As a matter of fact, there are more woodlands in china now than there were in 1998. • Revised: There are more woodlands in china now than there were in 1998.
• Revised : I have several reasons to prove that phone will not kill letter writing.
• （2）Born in a small town in South China in the early 50s, he grew up to be a famous musician.
• Revised: We thought she was charming, intelligent, and very capable.
• （5）The flower is red in color.
• （6）He returned in the early part of the month of August.
• （7）In my opinion, I think your plan is feasible.
• （8）Professor Smith is a learned and kind professor.
• (9) Smith College, which was founded in 1871, is the premier all-women’s college in the United States.