1. Rewrite the following sentences to make them concise and effective.
1)The plant is successful in terms of production.
The plant has high production.
2)We wish to acknowledge receipt of your letter of July 5.
Please write to me before July 5.
3)We are informed that similar goods of American origin have been
sold here at a level about 30% lower than you.
Similar American original goods have been sold here at a level about 30% lower than yours.
4)He will fly to Germany next week for the purpose of meeting Mr.
Stwartz in person.
He will fly to Germany next week to meet Mr. Stwartz in person.
5)This product not only is welcome for its reasonable price, but also for
its fine quality.
This product is welcome for its reasonable price and fine quality.
2. Rewrite the following sentences according to the principle of correctness.
1)Your demand for a 5% discount off the order of the goods narrows
our profit margin and we could not warrant it.
Sorry,your demand for 5% discount off the order narrows our margin,and we could not warrant it.
2)If there are some problems with the bikes, you can return it back to us,
even though over the warranty, we will change it without charge.
If there are some problems with the bikes, you can return it back to
us.Even though over the warranty, we will change it without charge.
3)We'll deliver you some trail order because of the satisfication of your
price and quality.
We'll deliver you some trail order because of the satisfaction of your price and quality.
4)As the market is declining, we recommend your immediate
acceptance.
As the market is declining, we recommend you immediate acceptance.
3. Rewrite the following sentences according to the principle of consideration
1)We are shipping your order on Friday.
Your order are shipped on Friday.
2)Your letter is not clear at all. I can’t understand it.
Sorry,I can’t understand some clauses on your letter,please send me a more clear one.
3)You must complete the enclosed form if you need correct shipment. Please complete the enclosed form so that we can arrange the correct shipment.
4)Unfortunately, your shipment won't be sent until January 3.
I am sorry to inform you that your shipment will delay until January 3.
5)Upon receiving your L/C amendment, we will arrange to have your
goods shipped.
Upon receiving your L/C amendment, we will arrange your goods shipped as soon as possible.
4. Rewrite the following sentences according to the principle of clarity.
1)You can deposit checks at designated ATMs.
2)We acknowledge receipt of your letter which was written on 2 July.
3)Thank you for sending us your catalog and price list.
4)This copier saves you both money and time.
5)The items you ordered will be arriving soon.
5. Questions and Answers
1)What are the functions of doing business writing in international
trade?
2)Please note some major differences between school writing and
business writing.
3)What is the real intention of doing business writing?
4)What is supposed to be a successful/effective business writing? How
to achieve it?
5)What is the definition of business English writing?
6)What is the definition of business English writing?
7)What does the principle of correctness refer to in doing business
writing?
8)How to achieve clarity in business writing?
9)How to show your consideration in business writing, there are two
techniques, what are they? Illustrate your points with some examples.
10)What should be noticed when you want to achieve conciseness in
your business writing?
11)There are seven steps for doing business writing, please explain
the second and sixth steps in your own words.。