5. Evaluationding
Compare the two passages on the handout and find out:
1. What makes a good piece of writing?
What makes a good piece of writing?
Good first Wellimpression and organized No Chinglish smoothly developed No Grammatical mistakes 1. neat handwriting书写 (use linking words) Exactly used words Various sentence patterns 2. structure结构 Everything required included 3. language语言 (within word limit) 4. content内容
3> Specialty & Hobbies
be good at ... do well in… got the first place in… like/enjoy doing… be fond of … be interested in… be crazy about… be tired of… win the first prize in…
What can we write about a person?
1. Age, birth place, background，appearance …
What 2. Personality & hobbies can we 3. Education write about 4. Big events in his or her a life ( or achievements ) person?
He is thin and tall, ___________ with (wearing) a pair of thick glasses. ___________________________ 3>他是一个很好看的男人,留着浓密的小胡子 和短发. He is a good-looking man, with a thick _______ moustache and short hair. (who has…) ____________________________
1>2002年我进入北京大学, 4年后毕业. went to study in (was admitted into) I _____________________________ Beijing University in 2002 and 4 years graduated from that university. later I_________________________ 2>我们学很多课程,包括… We learned many courses, including… ___________________________ (which included…) __________________ 3>1998年4月我获得了数学学士学位. I got/received my bachelor’s (master’s, ___________________________ doctor’s) degree ______________in maths in April 1998.
要求：（1）自拟标题； （2）可适当增加细节以使行文连贯； （3）必须包括所给要点；字数100字左右。
Our English Teacher - Bruce Bruce , our English teacher , is from England and in his fifties . He is tall and thin with a pair of glasses on his nose . Bruce is a nice teacher. For one thing, he is strict with us in our study . For another, he prepares his lessons well and corrects our homework carefully . What’s more, his teaching style is quite different from that of the others . In class he always encourages us to think hard and develop our ability to study on our own . He often helps and cares for us . In his spare time he often play with us . We feel proud to have such a good teacher. We all love and respect him .
Task 2: Pre-writing (to learn to express)
1> Age
born on Oct.1st,1992 于1992年10月1日出生____________________ 一名18岁大学生 an 18-year-old college student ______________________________ at the age of 14 (when…) 在14岁时候________________________ by the age of 30 到30岁的时候______________________ in his sixties 在他60多岁时____________________________ 注意:尽量用非谓语/同位语结构,使文章简洁,通顺. Born on _______ in _______, XXX , the______of_______, is a _______.
What words can we use to describe a person?
Words to describe a person
时尚的 fashionable 热心肠的 warm-hearted 随和的 easy-going 有毅力的 determined 精力充沛 energetic 勇敢的 brave 慷慨的 generous 体贴的 considerate 帅气的 handsome 杰出的 outstanding 迷人的 charming 乐观的 optimistic 幽默的 humorous 悲观的 pessimistic 勤奋的 diligent 热情的 enthusiastic 谨慎的 cautious 心不在焉的 absent-minded 健谈的 talkative 脾气不好的 bad-tempered 耐心的 patient 有天赋的 talented
2> Appearance (巧用with结构或定语从句)
1>她是一个圆脸,大眼睛,长发的可爱的女孩.
She is a lovely girl, with a round face, ____________ big eyes and long hair. (who has…) ____________________________ 2>他又瘦又高，戴着一副厚厚的眼镜.
1) as one of the best (most important) … 2) be respected by everyone 3) sing high praise for… speak highly of… / think highly of… 4) his story spread all over the … 5) make great contributions to… 6) be honored as … 7) set a very good example to… 8) I feel proud to have such a … 9) My … is such a person: kind-hearted and hard-working. I love my …
Organization of a composition
• Brief introduction – Name of the person – The relationship between you and him/her • Main body – Personality characteristics – His/Her activities or achievements • Conclusion – Your comments/feelings about the person
More expressions:
Task 3: Let’s have a try!
请根据下列提要写一篇短文介绍你的老师：
1）你的英语老师名叫Bruce，来自英国，50多岁 。 他又高又瘦，戴着一副眼镜； 2）他对学生要求严格，认真备课，仔细批改作业； 3）他教学方法不同于别人，鼓励学生思考，培养学生 自学能力； 4）他和蔼可亲，和学生打成一片，深受学生的爱戴和 尊敬。
5> Big events/achievements
6> Evaluation（注意运用一些动
词,形容词等短语/词组）
1>裴继升给我们作出了榜样, 大家都赞扬他。 sets us a good example Pei Jishen ______________________,so speaks highly of all the people _______________him. 2>鲁迅是中国最伟大的小说家之一,并且将会作 为杰出人物为人们所永远记住. Lu Xun is one of the greatest novelists in China and will ________________an be remembered as outstanding man forever.