高中英语复习 写作讲评课
Assessment & practice of Writing
• 2008年奥运会刚刚落幕，一家英文报刊在其网站上 征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议。假设 你叫李华，是该报的一名读者，请给该报编辑部写 一封信，谈谈你的建议和理由． 内容包括：
• １．向公众开放，用于健身 • ２．租给体育公司，创造经济效益 • ３．开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客． • ４．………
• Dear editor,
• I am Li Hua, a reader of your paper.
• ………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………
评分的四大纬度
内容
Beijing were held successfully. 11.The 29th Olympic Games which were
hosted in Beijing were held successfully.
写作步
骤: 体裁
1. 审题 时态 结构 要求
2. 列提纲/要点
字数 内容
3.连词成句
问题:
7.句子结构不完整 8.Only make full use of them does it make
sense . 9.Only by making full use of them does it make
sense 10.The 29th Olympic Games which hosted in
attract
问题:
2.时态语态问题 We may given it to the PE company. We may give it to the PE company..
3. 主谓一致问题
The sport stadiums is very great and is highly spoken of by the foreigners. The sport stadiums are very great and are highly spoken of by the foreigners.
①向公众开放，用于健身.
O.pen/be opened to the people/public/open them to
public.
Be used for/as; be made to;
D②o s租om给e体ex育er公cis司e/，bu创ild造ou经r 济bo效die益s/.strengthen our
body. 6. 介词短语的运用问题 I am writing to make some advice for how to
make full use of the sports stadium. I am writing to make some advice on how to
make full use of the sports stadium.
②征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.
Collect some advice
How to use/make use of /make the best of the stadium
After the Olympic Games
After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .
4. 逐字翻译问题 The stadiums can open to people for do exercise use.
The stadiums can be opened to people for doing exercises.
问题:
5. 词性混淆问题 It can creative money.. It can create/bring in money. Many people can use them to strong our body. Many people can use them to strengthen our
要点全，拓展有度，有效
语法
准确，复杂语法结构， 高级词汇，多种句型
框架---组织结构
连接词，作文结构紧
凑；流畅
思想
开放能引起读者的共鸣,灵魂
常见错 1.单误词:拼写或用错：
Give you some advise advice
I just provide you my own suggests.
suggestion They can attact visitors.
4.连句成篇
5. 润色修正
6. 定稿
1.审题: 体裁 书信格式
人称 第一,三人称
时态 一般现在时
要求
字数 内容
抓要点,
120个左右
①08年奥运会刚刚落幕.
Para.1 开头 信息1
②征集奥运会后如何综合利 用体育场馆的建议.
③你想写一些建议.
Para.2正文 信息2 向公众开放，用于健身
结构
信息3 租给体ቤተ መጻሕፍቲ ባይዱ公司，创造经济效益
信息4 开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客 Para.3结尾 信息5 总结，意愿……
2.列提纲 开头 /要点 信息1
①08年奥运会刚刚落幕.
①08年奥运会刚刚落幕. ②征集奥运会后如何综 合利用体育场馆的建议. ③你想写一些建议.
T.he 2008 Beijing Olympic/
were over/finished/held successfully in Beijing.
Gibvoed…ietso/Rent…to/be rented to
Sport company/companies which organize matches/organizing
matches
M③ake开/ c辟rea成te 旅mo游ne景y; b点rin，g 吸in m引o游ney客/make more profits
③你想写一些建议
Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some advice
Contribute some suggestions to you.
2.列提纲 /要点
正 文
信息2 向公众开放，用于健身 信息3 租给体育公司，创造经济效益 信息4 开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客