初中英语作文批改范例
书面表达：
以“My opinion on……”为题，写一篇英语短文。

要求：（1）能写出自己的真实见解；（2）层次清晰，意思连贯；
（3）书写工整，卷面整洁；（4）字数70—80词左右。

学生作文范文：
My opinion on television
庙仙初中九（2）班：张鹏Television has come into our life for many years. We can’t live happily without television.
①It can give us the latest information and news. It can open up our eyes and increase our knowledge. We can get happiness from the plays on television. We’ll be boring all day if there is no television. Television programs are attractive. After a whole day’s hard work we can sit before the television and drink a cup of tea. How wonderful it is! ②Television is also bad for people’s health. It’s bad for you to watch TV too long, especially bad for your eyes.
It is true that watching TV can influence our behavior. However, it depends on what we do. ③We can’t change what is on TV, but we can choose what we watch. Do you agree?
教师点评：
①Well done! How well you made the sentence!
②So smart! You tell me your real thought about television .
③It’s very clever of you to end your work with this beautiful sentence that you have learned!
Good! It’s excellent you haven't made any mistakes this time! I’m so glad to see your work has improved! But it’s much better to be creative.You’d better use some short sentences to instead of the long ones . Do you think so?
I hope you can work harder and make more progress. Cheer up!
指导教师：姚荣军
工作单位：庙仙初中。