考试分析19分大作文：
As is vividly depicted in the picture, two disabled men are running fast through teamwork
although each of them has only one leg. Obviously, it isteawork that makes it possible for them
togo anywhere they want go.
Simple as it is, what the picture conveys to us is thought-provoking. With the development of
economy and society, competition is becoming increasingly fierce. It is impossible for anyone
tofinish a work all by himself. Hence, people in mounting numbers put great emphasis on
teamwork. In fact, it has been universally acknowledged that the ability ofteamwork is the most
essential qualification that anyone who wants to achieve success should possess.
Accordingly, it is imperative for us to take some measures to enhance the sense ofteamwork in our
society. We should bear in mind that teamwork is of great significance to both our siciety and
ourselves. Every one should have the ability ofteamwork. Only in this way can we achieve success
and only in this way can our society become more harmonious to live in.
参考作文：
The spirit of mutual help and cooperation, an extraordinarily essential factor which motivates
people much more than individual competition does especially in this 21st competitive society, is
of the utmost importance and necessity for us youngsters.（中心主线：此段可以省略——主题词+同位语+从句+观点）
According to this inspiring and vivid picture, there aretwo handicapped adolescents continuing
their new journey on the ground, supportingeach other with their powerful hands. Crutches left
behind, they have successfully conquered the difficulty of lameness which might have
confusedthe majority of the disabled. The caption under the cartoon indicates,―You have merely
one leg and so do I. Helping each other, we can travel extensively to everywhere.‖（图画描述：there be+倒装+with伴随状语+分词伴随状语+虚拟语气）
Undoubtedly, this cartoon arouses deep concern over the issue ofmutual support. The message
conveyed in it, I suppose, is twofold. In the first place, in today's world, if one wants to achieve
something or intends to fulfill one of his ambitions, he has to work hard, make efforts and get
prepared on the basis ofhis team. Otherwise, he will take no advantage of opportunities when they
come to visit him. Secondly, the difference between a man who succeeds and one who does not
lies only in the fact whether or not he couldcooperates successfully with others. The successful
personalways achieve accomplishments in his career with the assistance of his colleagues and
partners. The unsuccessful person, on the other hand,works merely on himself and just waits to see
pass by.（主题句+过渡句+必要性+重要性）
To specify this statement, I would like to take an example. To demonstrate,the students who are in
the process of preparing for the National Postgraduate Entrance Examination – great many in
number, doubtful about their chances and choices in mind – motivate and encourage each other to
get rid of the overwhelming pressure from that exam, through which they soon regain the
confidence and courage after cheering each up, for they know it clearly that only cooperation and teamwork can make it possible for them to go through in face of anxieties and insecurity.（举例论证：主题句+关联词+细节例子）
It is my view that, first of all, this drawing has to be frequently used to enlighten the juvenile to
learn the significance of cooperation with each other in order to interact smoothly with others in a
team. Furthermore, this spirit can be extended to the historical truth that the rise and fall of a
nation depends on how citizens are united by one heart. When people strive collectively for their
nation, the country is bound to step towards prosperity. Just asJohn Adams, the second U. S.
president quoted fromthe ancient Greek Aesop’s Fables, ―United we stand, divided we fall.‖（评论写法：个人+社会；若不会写，直接写建议措施。）
小作文高分作文：
Dear Bob,
I am writing to make an apology to you for I forgot to return a music CD which I borrowed
from you last week. Yesterday I have come back from Canada and I found it in my luggage. I am
so sorry that you cannot listen to it at present.
The CD which I borrowed from you is made in Canada, so I believe you can find another one
in your local store. How about your buying another CD by yourself and I will pay for it? If you
cannot find the similar one, I would send it back to you through a post office. And it there are any
other solutions you like, please let me know.
I am sorry again for my carelessness. Looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
小作文参考作文：
Dear Bob,
I am that tenant from China who had been living in your house in Canada for two weeks. And
I am writing this letter to you to express my apologies because I have mistakenly brought back the
Beatles CD I borrowed from you during my stay in your home.（首段：个人介绍+写信目的）
I was in such a hurry that I packed everything in my luggage without checking carefully. Had
I paid more attention then, I wouldn’t have made such a silly mistake. To solve the problem, I
would like to send this CD back to you by Express Mail Service, or alternatively I can compensate
you at a reasonable price, and if you don’t mind, I may bring it back to you next time I go to
Canada.（中间段：覆盖情景信息点）
Once again, please accept my sincere apology for any inconvenience I have caused. Please let
me know which solution you prefer at your earliest convenience. I’m looking forward to your
reply.（末段：感谢/道歉+盼复）
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming