⑦ 同样重要的是 (inverted sentence)
• Equally important is…
⑧ 收获成功
• yield / help you reap/harvest success
Steps 3-6
• Step 3 : Make a list of key points of each paragraph
• Step 4 : Combine each points into cohesive sentences
• Step 5: Combine sentences into a well structured paragraph
2. A seven-year-old girl was born without hand. But she had a great tendency to be independent since she was a baby. Finally she won a national award for handwriting for special-need students even without prosthetics.
In front of obstacles, too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life.
Although the little girl is disabled, she is brave enough to face up to the biggest obstacle in her life.
• Constant effort together with positive attitude will__b_ri_n_g__u_s_s_u_c_c_e_s_s_____.
2) Combine all the points into cohesive (连贯) sentences
– by using linking phrases
3. know how to assess your essay.
Question for discussion
What makes a good essay?
A Good Essay
Content
Structure
Language
Clean and clear handwriting
All points included & to the point
(How)
Q1 What?
• positive attitude • optimism; • courage; • bravery • determination; • perseverance ; • persistence • constant effort; •…
Q2 Why ?
• positive attitude; constant effort
• Step 6: Polish up your writing
Paragraph 1 : Make a summary
Q: How to make a summary of a narrative(叙述) writing?
– Based on the basic elements Who What (events) How (effects) Why (reasons)
• Step 1 Read instructions • Step 2 Make an outline • Step 3 List key points • Step 4 Link words into cohesive(连贯)
sentences • Step 5 Organize sentences into paragraphs • Step 6 Polish up your writing
Paragraph 2 inspirations
(2 Points at least)
3 steps to follow
1) Write down the key points by asking yourself the following questions:
Q1 What inspires you most? (What) Q2 Why are you inspired? (Why) Q3 How do these aspects influence our life?
Good beginning & ending Well organized paragraphs Proper linking words
No grammatical mistakes
Appropriate words
Varied sentence patterns
Six steps to organize an essay
the light for us to find our correct path and secure a better
destination. _____⑦___________（倒装句：同样重要
的是） our constant effort towards our goal with the courage
•made people amazed
Which one is better?
1. Overcoming her disability, Ellick won a handwriting competition for the disabled kids, without even using prosthetics. Her courage and determination are inspiring and impressive.
P1 Summary
P2 General inspirations
P3 Ways to deal with personal obstacles
The story tells of …
What inspires me … I was deeply impressed by…
Personally, From where I stand,
Step 1 Read instructions
30; 120; at least two points; no original sentences
Theme: handle obstacles in life 3 paragraphs
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Step 2 : Make an outline
② 当遭遇困难时
• in front of obstacles • when facing/ encountering … • faced with/ confronted with obstacles • meeting with/ running up against…
③ 退缩 /放弃
• shrink back; hold back; withdraw • give up; give in; surrender;
Q3 How ?
• When we are in the dark, positive attitude ser_v_e_s_a_s_t_h_e_li_g_h_t _w_e_c_a_n_u_s_e_t_o_f_in_d__o_u_r _c_o_rr_e_c_t path _a_n_d_s_e_c_u_re_a__b_e_tt_e_r _d_es_t_in_a_t_io_n__________.
of never giving up, which will ___⑧____(收获) sure success.
① 让我触动最深的是…
• What touches/inspires/enlightens me most is.. • What impresses / strikes me is…
3) Polish up your writing
Try to use some advanced words and varied sentence patterns:
____①________(让我触动最深的是) is Anya’s positive attitude as well as her constant effort ______②__________ （当遭遇困难时）. In reality, too many people choose to ____③___(退缩) because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life, while the little girl, _________④ ________（倒装句：虽然她残疾了）, is brave enough to ______⑤___(直面) the biggest obstacle in her life. And she shows us that when we are in the dark, __________⑥ ___________(强调句式：正是积极的态度）serves as
Just for reference:
What touches me most is Anya’s positive attitude as well as her constant effort facing obstacles. (1)_I_n_r_e_a_l_it_y (现实中), too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life, (2)w__h_il_e__the little girl, (3)d_e_s_p_i_te_the fact that she is disabled, is brave enough to face up to the biggest obstacle in her life. (4)_A_n_d__her achievement shows us that when we are in the dark, positive attitude serves as the light to find our correct path and secure a better destination. (5)M_e_a_n__w_h_i_le_, together with positive attitudes, constant efforts will bring us sure success.